Liquid treasure
Stored for ages-
Mellowed, yet holding
The Sting.
Only with you
Could I share it.
For only you could
Know, the value...
For no one else
Could even make me
Want to try...
For, no one else
Was deserving too...
Your tenderness
The gentleness
Of your quiet question:
Why are you holding it in?
When you read
The pain,
In my eyes..
Was enough.
Trembling, in your arms,
My head tucked into your shoulder,
I can only let you
Soak it too..
That treasure:
Now as much yours...
22 April, 2008
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A re-post again :) Till the muse visits again :)
hmm, it maybe a repost, but its the first time i am reading it!! :)
ReplyDeletelovely description of a tear...!! wow... every one has their own viewpoint and urs fascinated me...! just awesome...
*Liquid treasure
Stored for ages-
Mellowed, yet holding
The Sting.*
loved it...really did!!
vinay
ps: thanx for the blogroll!! :)
Marvelous, yet again! Loved it! :)
ReplyDeleteHave you heard the song "Kuch is tara" by Atif Aslam? It's a beautiful song, one of my favorites too!
ah beautiful liquid gold!!
ReplyDeleteI always wanted to ask you this - is there really a "you" in your real life - the "you" that soaks your tears, the "you" that understands you without spoken words?? I generally have a pillow to soak my tears :(
ReplyDeleteFirst four lines...I did some wild guesses on what this special liquid is..I even searched for my old chemistry text book:P
ReplyDeleteas I read on , I opened my mouth in wonder...gr88 one:D
Splendid... (Applause)....
ReplyDelete"I can only let you
Soak it too..
That treasure:".. lucky to have that YOU... :)....
Vinay, thank you for the lovely way you perceived this, and the kind words on it!
ReplyDeleteTara, yes, I love that song... it is one of my favourites!!! Thanks.. to have connected that song in some way to the write!!!
Meena, you know :) you've read this before haven't you? At AP? Thanks for reading it again!
Roopa, a million dollar question!! But then again, the answer is very simple, at so very many levels.. :) The Pillow.. the teddy bear, lol, and of course a very "you"... :) Thank you so much, even for asking! It makes me feel that something in it reached out!!!
Praveen, hehehe... that was the intention, really to confound at the start.. glad that someone fell for it!!! Thanks for the sweet words!!
Mahita, Thank you!! I have something for you, again, on Overdrive.. :)
Wow, you have a great poetic heart! Keep it coming! Good job dear!
ReplyDeleteWelcome to my blog…….
SUCH A BEAUTY ! :)
ReplyDelete@Femin Susan, thank you !
ReplyDeleteShalu, :) Thanks!
your trademark style...perfectly written...gives you this feeling of warmth...
ReplyDelete@Evanescent Flower, I do know you:) But somehow cannot place the name:) The poems you share are hauntingly familiar:)
ReplyDeleteThanks for the kind words!